by Du Lac
"vacant coitus" is a cool phrase. Perhaps too much repetition of "products of his,her,their,my,environment", which is not a particularly poetic phrase anyway.
this was an interesting read-- "product of his environment" in general reads to me in a cynical tone. It is not a pretty line, but it is powerful. I agree with Sack that it might be over-repeated, losing its strength through dilution.