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The last two lines were unique-- the rest read through a scene many of us have seen many times.... if you are serious about writing, iI would suggest trying to make this scene more personalized, how was it different than the rest of these scenes? is there something you can add to make these people more real, attached to a personality. The scene was described well, can you make us feel something for the characters? As I said, the last two lines Do this as you give a cynical twist.

Thanks for sharing this-- hope you do not mind my crfitique, I see promise in your writing, and look forward to more

annaswirls