by demure101
Very original, demure. However, the diction was off to me in some of the lines. That would work for me where there would be fury in the Apocalypse when words are supposed to be insufficient, but, as the musical piece suggests, there would be moments of peace, acceptance, and joy where I was expecting more of the customary "demure" magic in the choice and interplay of words. That said, "the voice of the void, like a monk's, starts to sing." is as good a line as any I've read of yours because it's chock-full of many images and interpretations of them, at least for me.
I admire how you stretched yourself here.
because there are points where the writing actually gave me chills (it is that good), but it's too long overall. I'd either cut it by half or make it into two or three separate poems on the theme. And then I'd submit it (them) to a poetry journal or somewhere besides here.
the angels hymn and life ceases until the next time. , TK U MLJ LV NV