All Comments on 'Requiem and Celebration'

Oh the joy?

Of life?

In the nursing home...

Nice and clean. A fine poem.

I question only two things - the structure that allows the lines to shrink in length as each strophe progresses (I suppose that was done to reflect the shrinkage of life with age? or, impending death?)

I also think the poem is more effective if you eliminate the last strophe, which seems to be a repeat, more or less, of the previous one, which I like better.

Nice work.

of your poem. It is sad but elegaic and dignified. I agree with Rain Man that an edit that made the look of the poem progressively more spare would be a very effective visual counter to the theme. What I wouldn't change though is the plain honesty of the language. It communicates the acceptance of an inevibility really well. :)

Peace,

Angeline

I think this would read better without the word "further" and an unfortunate repetition of the word life from one stanza to the next. Otherwise, very effective and one of your best poems.