by SweetOblivion
" rotten , vulgar , withered , noxious " ----you make us hate the creep whoever it is ?!?! 5-ed .
break out of the SOS
i fived
although about half is trite, cliched
this is good
If you're brought withered blooms to see you off,
Do you want lessons? I'm quite good in this genre. laughs
in a poem that revels in its vileness. I think it'd be even stronger it you cut it back some: fewer sharper images would make the poem cut like a knife. Too many and it loses its overall shock value.
Love the last two lines. A perfect ending that feels just right to me.