by Trent_Dutch
some nice lines in here (I will come back for detail) I just wanted to say that I found there to be many more commas than needed, it really made me pause when a pause was not needed. I will come back with comma blinders and read it again because it is well worth a second trip.
prowls like an animal. I really like the second stanza. It feels very sexy.
your poem was mentioned on the thread
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I agree about the end of line commas. The end of a poetic line is normally a pause in itself (but not always).
I like this poem, but I am pushed away a little by the intermixing of the overly common and the infrequently used words. They don't blend for me; rather they clash in my ear.