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<br>Your first poem, written recently, is a new venture for you and given time I'm sure it will all work out. Your obvious intelligence, on display in all your stories, has not deserted you here except I get the feeling that you have not really thought too deeply about the nature of poetry. Poetry can be many things and very different things to different people but, unless your are some kind of remarkable protege, it does require some forethought to be effective.<br><br>

You are going to have to take some time out to learn about the nature of poetry, if your poems are going to be more than clever and actually engage the soul of your reader. Having read your other work published here, I'm convinced that you have it in you to be a good poet, but it requires work. Champagne82 has responded to your thread, "feedback on my poem" with some really practical advice that you can use as a jumping off point for your study of poetry. Welcome to a wonderful addiction.<br>