All Comments on 'She Cries In the Grass'

I read this yesterday and wanted to come back to it. It's good, miss trust. But needs some work. It needs to be tightened up -- like say bye bye to some words. Yeah, it's a bit verbose and the lines are choppy in some areas. You should definitely consider revising. This poem has some good lines, good material, and it's worth a few edits to improve it.