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All Comments on 'She Is'

by Currahee_Gent

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ishtatishtatalmost 10 years ago
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If you dropped all the 'she is's' , she might be more mysterious and interesting.

greenmountaineergreenmountaineeralmost 10 years ago

Agree with ishtat. If you cut back the pronouns by 2/3's, including "her," i think you'd present a nice lyrical poem.

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