All Comments on 'Sick Of The Rain'

Welcome to Lit with this really fine first piece looking for that bit of brightness to fill a drab life. But as for me, I'm sick of the snow.

<P> Generally a good write but there is a spot where I'd like to suggest one very small little tweak to smooth the flow:

<P>"My heart is full of tears

<P>World is lonely

<P>My mind is full of fears"

<P>Try:

<P>"My heart full of tears

<P>World is lonely

<P>My mind full of fears"

for some sunshine in my life...looking for better days ahead. Well done.

for some sunshine in my life...looking for better days ahead. Well done.