by lostandfounder
Smooth and well paced, I like the way you've tinted erotic the very difficulty of writing erotic poetry.
Ok, I am working on fresh and original one liners for my wife, but IT'S HARD! Seriously, I loved your poem. The way you play with the language; turning cliché’s of erotic prowess at the beginnings of lines into ruins in a quick shift of a phrase.
Could not help thinking about one chanson by Georges Brassens in which the lover vows to never marry the love of his life - so that he could prevent their love from unavoidable destruction…