All Comments on 'Speaking in Tongues'

DIDN'T LIKE THIS AT ALL,

I GET WHAT YOU WERE TRYING TO DO

BUT YOU JUST DIDN'T PULL IT

OFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

here is a 5 for your effort. the title is a nice working title. there is some good stuff in this. tightening it up will help it out. but, the comment that was left was not very tactful. if they had left you some constructive feedback it would have been way better than a lashing........just keep coming back.......don

at times, in what we really want and what we have settled for in life. I understand what youre saying, but I agree with dcpoet, it could use a little tightening, and yeah, ignore meanines who type in CAPS and never leave any real advice...keep up the good work---maria

"I GET WHAT YOU WERE TRYING TO DO

BUT YOU JUST DIDN'T PULL IT

OFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

what have we here, umpteenth exclamation points.

Since said nameless commenter did not elaborate on what you are trying to pull off, I can only conclude, you must have been successful, since I seem to hear an echo coming from said nameless commenter's head!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

A FIVE JUST FOR SPITE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I find some interesting thoughts and some nice phrasing, but to me this could be just as easily be written in paragraphs as as the opening thoughts of an article or short story. Line breaks alone don't make poetry out of prose.

What makes the difference? I'm not sure I know how to explain except perhaps by example, and then I am being very presumptuous. But, for instance, I might have written your lines:

"But it is hardest to hate

those whose lives mirror your own."

as:

"It is hardest to hate

those who live in mirrors."

Not too much difference, but it leaves the reader something to think about, something not completely said in a declarative sentence.

Anyway, keep writing and especially reading poets whose work you like. Forget the negativity and glean the positive. - If you let bad reviews and rejection bother you, you will never be a real poet. ;) :rose: ;)

p.s. I don't use thermometers.