All Comments on 'Submissive Light'

Mmmmmmmmmm very well done! :)

A 5 because it thrilled me! A magnificent submissive poem! Hits the mood of D/s right on the head! Beautiful!

but even so this could be much better. It is so full of cliches--which means things we've heard a million times before, especially here on Lit!

The cliche fairy has been busy here. In you defense, this is a genre that is very hard to write without cliche; it can be done but it is very hard work. Don't use end rhyme in this kind of poetry, this particular diminishes the a serious poem.