All Comments on 'Summary Execution'

too cliche too frapee too canapee

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white noise of the mind

phallic objects deleted text (strange line)

(a bit out of the ordinary)

finish. (cannot comment more; note score)

This poem grabbs ya.. Shakes ya.. and throws ya in a tail spin..I loved it. The imagery.. the wordy words. The never ending *what could be next* quality.. Wonderful one~~!! Well deserving of the infamoues E~~!!

Very fresh poem.~

a bit too rushed, a bit too basic , but perhaps what we all think/feel sometimes...

I agree that it seemed rushed, but surely that was the idea behind this - the rush as the whole sex act takes place. It's not always slow and gentle, nor is it always Wham, Bam, thank you, Mam.

Loved it. Gave it 5 votes plus 100% here.

I believe this was a little rushed as well. Would have liked to see more words to draw the reader in. Just a little too simple. No harm meant.

Remember-

taste

feel

vision

I think we all have been there. Words written in black and white trying to portray the desire that is felt; the need to get it across through times new roman font...soften by the use of italics

Honey

I enjoyed the frenzied, erotic feel of this write, Summer. It brings to mind a passion that burns so hot that you can hardly wait to get your clothes off before you're getting into it right by the front door. As to previous comments about it being rushed, I'd like to quote this part:

"tear it off

faster faster

offer off

panties thongs bikinis strings and gs

acceleration of events

terminal velocity"

I think that was the point of this poem. A lot of times, simplicity is the key. Simplicity can make the most impact. Congrats of attaining the elusive E, Summer, and please don't let a low therm score take that away from you. :)

... with the "too rushed" comments. I think it perfectly captures the frenetic nature of ePassion. 'Grats on the E! ~Imp

This is fresh. I like your creativity in expressing something that everyone who lives on the net understands. Enjoyed!

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