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by quietpoly
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YDDalmost 20 years agoLife is no fun if. . .
it is porpoiseless.
Your poetry is generally very good.
I like the theme and metaphor in this one,
but you might wish to consider dropping the "a"s in this stanza
since "Boat" has no article.
"Boat rocks
on sea
like a top
on a table
tossing and turning
but purposeless."
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