All Comments on 'Temptation'

and you're probably not prepared to have someone come along and make suggestions about it. But... I have to say that it may be interesting to try these line breaks:

It?s like fire

Fun to tease

It calls

Makes me want to play

Such a rush the

Flame brings

Dancing

Full of power

I reach to touch

Burning twisted satisfaction

This pulls it together a bit better and places more emphasis on your ending stanza. By the way, I like that last stanza about the burning twisted satisfaction.

of this poem almost led me to skip over it too fast. I like the images, but agree with Eve that the phrasing could have been more forceful. Look forward to more.

can't always have it your way... as for the stanzas and spacing, I felt the way i did it made it more of what I was trying to show to my audience

And I would love to be able to tease you.