All Comments on 'temptress'

your words were painted with passion (~.-)

Raw....sensuous.....very well done! I look forward to more poetry from you.... :)

...emotion and rhyme but your rhythm is out of kilter. Try tapping out the syllables as you read your poem aloud then prune the lines to fit the rhythm.

Tess

your meter is out on line 6 and should be *she'll* line 4

Thankyou for your helpful suggestions. What I am unsure of is to whether it is best to follow the rules of poetry, of to break them. As in the composition of music it is the discordant note, the changing rhythm that adds interest to a song. Would this also be the same with prose?