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Anonymousover 18 years agoa bit
too many THEs..you can compress this one more imho....and I liked the theme...blue
Jennifer Cover 18 years agoWelcome to Literotica
The The's aside I enjoyed your
poem.
I do agree with blue though,
you could cut a few of them
out.
Keep writing and posting!
LeBrozover 18 years ago~~
A little tighter;
could yield great impact.
Could work it with just the first two "the's."
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