All Comments on 'The Dice are Loaded'

~ All the while strange empathetic thought trains

tiptoe over saffron tones sung by cool cats. ~

had a very cool feel to it.

Your poetry is interesting to say the least.

very beat/ jazz/ stream of conscious.

The word choices appear to be almost random at first but on a second read the meaning and images come through.

My only criticism would be that they are all almost " cookie cutter" in length and line breaks.

I'd love to see you experiment with short bursts or long stanzas with punctuation to force the reader to read it like you heard it in your head.

Just a thought..in any case it's very good

Thank you for sharing

mentioned in review

~Syn