All Comments on 'The Hunt'

glad to see you break out of "Hallmark" mode

100

but not quite there

...visuals. I'd have fewer line breaks to make less choppy. Also you might have described the bag, stag or doe, boar or fox?

I like the "tangle" of dogs, easily visualized.

Tess

but very well written. I like the way you've broken the syntax across lines and snuck in some interesting wordplays, too. Also the poem is full of movement, scent and strong visual though I think the last strophe is least successful with that. You could, for example, revise the last three lines in a way so we hear the ale being poured or the glass slid across a table, something to keep those sense tickling phrases going right to the end of the poem. :-)

A very good poem! Great imagery! I especially liked "legs and teeth before the fire". For some reason it reminded me of Jack London.

I did like this. The pacing and simple story. Nice.