by Tzara
I don't see a single spare word in this poem that needs removing. You say so much with so very few words and I admire your skill. Thank you for sharing your poetry.
wso
Well done, but I think it should be listed as erotic; at least it is for me.
excellent, so much packed into these lines, little details like "the one with all the stops" that make all the difference.
bravo, Tzara!
~as
I remember reading this on the boards and the first two times I read it, I read the second line as "his ego", but "her ego" makes things a whole lot more interesting.
Whenever you use lightning in your poems, things really seem to come alive for you, T!
with your usual flair for imagination. The imagery in both stanzas is great, esp in the first stanza with that line 'her ego left for Omaha'
that is a picture
Great stuff, as always