All Comments on 'The Lover'

neatly constructed and avoiding the clichés too often prevalent with this rhyme-scheme. you offer some original imagery, making us think beyond the lines - fill in our own background to the scenario in front of us. overall quite clever, but my one mental 'tic' happens when i read:

My Woe!

ok, it's meaning isn't out of place... but somehow i picture this scene in a more modern setting than that phrase admits and, as i said, it's the one place my brain does an odd little twitch.

I keep stumbling on line 9 and wanting to read it as 'bring you sleep' ... good read though

yeh, what chip said - 5