All Comments on 'The Paled Dawn'

is conveyed to me in the language i can relate to. it is a nicely done piece.....don

I enjoyed your deceptive simplicity as always but the one thing that didn't work for me was /The force/grinds us/together

It feels as though some third party is involved. Maybe it's just me.

b'brig

a good build up and

an enjoyable read,

thanks.

~ J