by naughtycakes
I really like the use of Greek myth that you use as illustration to make your power statement. It's an interesting blend of colloquial with classical that doesn't quite make it, in my opinion. That's my taste though. Thanks for sharing your poems.
I have to agree with the previous comment but leave it at that would not be fair IMO to the poem's other qualities- namely, the richness of the imagery, the energy, and the imagination which even if doesn't hold the poem together is indeeed very captivating.