All Comments on 'The Story of My Life'

An understandable write, from one feeling too young to start writing her memoirs.

I enjoyed your tale (~_~)

In a brief few years looking back ~ always in fragments.

I tend to agree with duddle’s take. Yet, somewhat paradoxically the poem itself has a bit too much of the “lined up” telling quality (kind of the summary type the guy wants…), and too little of the “pointillism” (I like the painting image, a la Seurat ), the way you say you define yourself (or should I say un-define yourself).

You started telling your ‘micro-experiences’ in the first two lines of the second stanza, but then drifted. In the third stanza I was not sure anymore if you are continuing or giving a metaphor for the kind of experiences you would consider appropriate for the telling of your life. See the use of plural in the third stanza. Is that a report of an actual repeated experience of yours or an allusion to the qualities you would like to have in your biography?

KOLKORE, this wasn't intended to be poetic pointilism, although I may have to try it now that you've mentioned it. This was my somewhat angry response to someone who literally asked me to "tell me the story of you life - just enough so I have a sense of where you've been."

I really like the idea of poetic pointilism though... I'm going to try it. I'll post it here if it's any good.

A few snapshots in time..

your pen name from it or for it...

makes the reader feel the words and terrific imagry...

nice work......