All Comments on 'Thick'

Works so well

with blue overwhelming;

longing for a new color instead ~

like ... red...

A very nice use of color-- the abstraction is kept from wandering by the concrete examples and the simple sentiment. Well done, CW.

Fly

Very nice write, the only suggestion, I can make is consider moving this line down further,

"My God, there’s too much blue"

switching it with the

"My God"

enjoyed

Your poem has been mentioned in the new poem review thread.

I really like the "too much blue". the sensoral juxtaposition is really nice. maybe you want to work it more... also what if it was less literal... I love that you don;t lead us by the hand but "platlettes" is such an interesting word, I'd love to see it worked into a less literal moment and into something synesthetic or rythmic...

but then again, I like to work real loose.

the closer is nice.

thanks for such a great moment.

As always you have written this poem and allowed us a peak into the depth of your soul. Thank you