All Comments on 'Too High'

at the second stanza, what does it have the others don't? Contrast, for one.

these lines also

I want to feel the air against my skin

Like tiny knives caressing, cutting and marking.

keep heading in these directions, for a new writer not bad

5ed

ps. try to minimize...

experienced in Real Life : a Slice of Life picture postcard as it were ! 5-ed .

And Agree with Ash and 12-0-1, Very nice job. I also agree with 12-0-1 -try to minimize. makes it more potent. Easy to say but I suffer the same issue, once you get the words out there it's hard to edit. Worth it, though