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1. perfect imperfections --don't use hook of popular song, be original

2. title?--here are 4-- Smile, you are on my menu, or Nasty and Sweet, Let me take you down a different road, Deal and Steal.

3. is "I'm a real man" needed?

4. lots of nice stuff here--keep at it

5. your lines are all from one side, yours, let her shine through also. For example end poem with , "I do love you, I do, don't you see"