by das_risiko
Nice simple clean piece. Just a small suggestion for you to consider for the ending. Try changing:<P>
<Br>begging for the hardness
<Br>of my manhood
<Br>to kiss her hot sugar walls<P>
to:<P>
<Br>begging for my hardness
<Br>to kiss her hot sugar walls.
You poem has been recommended in the "New Poems" thread at the Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!