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AngelineAngelinealmost 16 years ago
It's good but I'd edit it down a bit

however the Plato shadows on the cave wall reference is excellent. Glad I read it!

sassynycsassynycalmost 16 years ago
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"But feel free to argue with my shadow until dawn

While I check the scenery in the back of my skull,

Pretty silhouettes cast upon the cave wall"

these lines jumped out at me. you give a colorful description of mentally checking out on someone while remaining physically present. you even managed to make your distance sound beautiful in a poetic way.

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