All Comments on 'Viva Las Vegas Baby!'

I liked this! Thanx!

and it ante's up nice......nice flow........and nicely done......don

you have hit the jackpot!

Some great lines. I particularly like these -

she walked by and blinked

her levelor blinds

blue was the shade -

and the sequence that follows. Well done. A five.

Tess

mentioned in the new poems review thread.

Great poem rare, you

never dissapoint me!

Fantastic stuff, and

i think your ending

is just fine!

thanks.

~ J

I love this poem!! while not a huge fan of rhyme, this worked wonderfully here. One bit of advice, just a suggestion, if you end your poem here, with this verse, you get a MUCH more powerful ending.--

twice the loser

in the game

in the bed

lady luck has fled

no one the wiser

except the voices

in my head