All Comments on 'Voice Swish'

I like everything but the title and "swooshing".

I don't see how "Trickle" and "Splashing particles one by one" equals a "voice swish", and "swooshing" just flat out leaves me cold! - Just a little work and you will have a very enjoyable poem (IMHO).

forget the negative outlook on life

this is a vibrant and very moving poem

I loved it, for it's meaning and flow

I really liked the "Voice Swish"

really very good, and I agree with relten, the swoosh might be a bit much, but other than that, the second stanza is awesome!!! I hope you keep sbmitting, I think you have ability you have just begun to tap into :)

glad to return the favor. keep on. it's in your heart.

---elbiscayne