All Comments on 'Watch me, watch you'

Simply...*Gasp*...breathtaking!

I love this one... The game, the pleasure, her release... Wonderful portrayal of mutual masturbation :-)

@ Erectus

I kinda did get lost in this one, I added those three lines so I would stop writing. I would like to add that it does detract from the final imagery a little now that you have pointed it out. I thought it was adding a stamp of finality, but what better finality than a tear inducing climax!

@ashes

Who says we can't play games as adults? And the prizes are far sweeter than candy!

Rules laid down the groundwork for a truly Orgasmic & earth-shatterin' Climax : salute your erotic imagination , Dude , hat's off to you !

i.e."My cock straining like a wild animal"

although some might prefer a shorter version, if one reads on, then one is rewarded. The last three lines are optional. I would prefer an ending on a high note of passion rather than the writer's observation on what is obvious already to the reader. Still, a well done maxed poem.