All Comments on 'Wearing Thin'

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thunderf64thunderf64over 20 years ago
Wearing Thin

You need to keep with the same rythum of the stanzas. Break your rythumn for effect with the "You," next line "You are ...."

It would convey the feel better.

Other than that I liked it.

(Okay okay I have felt the same sentiment shere in my home)

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