All Comments on 'Weaving an Endless Tapestry'

Thanks Molly. Your description of the events that lead to:

"Now all that is left of that warmth and comfort

Is a dull stiffness of long unused muscles

And invisible bruises in intimate places."

were great.

This piece may have scored higher in my estimation had you corrected the spelling errors in your poem. Don't hesitate to use a spell checker on your work before you submit it for posting. You'd be surprised at what it will do to make the rhythm of your writing less jarring.

Molly I think you are trying too much for a first poem. It starts with a nice poetic feel, but then breaks down into prose at times. You would also benefit from an editor, or at least a spell checker. I think you have talent, but you need to learn how to say what you feel.

Keep writing, that is the only way to improve.