All Comments on 'White Rat'

original idea well done, it could do with some editing though cut out a lot of the 'she' / 'she was' /'she would'

maybe;

moist lips kiss my neck,

nibble my ear,

press her pelvis into me

.......some of the "woulds" could go but over all I like this.

"We almost never spoke.

I knew that she would do anything I asked.

But I never asked.

Why is it that now, after all these years,

She is the one I remember? "

A fine finish.

Tess.

Five.