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Click hereO you, who have never been so young
let me tell you how it is
where a bad day never comes.
Where a bad day never comes
the long-legged bird wades,
cherishing his curved, soft neck
above the flooded lake.
Under him nothing evil swirls
Nothing evil swirls about his legs
and the sickle moon, she rises nearly
and the sun she always rises;
Dry husks fall away from buds, like now
the pale flesh of the leaf unfolds.
And the pale flesh of the leaf unfolds
a man and a woman who float
on the odor of pine past twilight,
darkness blossoming always
as I heard it one morning, all night
in the round hum of my mother’s arms
O anyone, who has never been so young.
this one before, as I'm such a sap for anything written with children in mind, but so happy to have discovered it now. You achieved conveying the wonderment of innocence in the eyes of the young through the "eyes" of your words and especially in the line,"in the round hum of my mother's arms". That phrase lifted Me to heaven today! From a Mommy and Grammy...thank you!
Vixxx
It takes focus to read this one, but when I was there, it really lulled me into it's soothing pace. Very nice.
Your poem was mentioned on the thread
"New Poems Reviews" for saturday
Thanks for the journey ...(~_~) Art~
what is the form? (I am ignorant of these things,) but I know that your poem settled me into a very contented mood with your gentle imagery and soft rhythm. An excellent write!! hope to see more from you
... that this really settled into a calm place with me. Very nice. ~Imp
if this is a particular "form" of poetry but I liked it very much.
The line repetition, though slightly varied, the wonderful descriptions:
~cherishing his curved, soft neck
above the flooded lake.~
A very nice piece of writing.
I hope to see more.
Thank you