All Comments on 'Yesterday's Fodder'

Lots of good stuff in the poem. Two typos: "as the man standing in front of you[r] on the train" and marvelous. I really like how your poem keeps flashing back to yesterday moments. This poem will be mentioned on the new poems review thread on the poetry forum.

Someone is furiously disassociating in these relations…and the images are more vivid and real than the reality… I am not sure how much longer this guy would still be in the picture…

I know I sound like a suck up. Maybe I am. I dunno. I think this one is both sexy and depressing, if that makes sense. "Rotund" should be "round" I think, and not on a separate line. "Unabashed" is perhaps superfluous. Then there is this: "as the man standing in front of your on the train / is tall and handsome and his hips are in front of your mouth / if you should only open your lips

and should the train bump / yesterday at five-thirty" I mean, oh my. That not not makes me feel incompetent as poet but makes me think well of mass transit. :-)

i like the way you describe scenes with such detail. this should be edited for typos, and the way some of the lines end, feels awkward to me. but you paint a hell of a picture with words lady! looking forward to reading more from you.