by Wants2benaughty
It is my favorite so far :)
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Yes, it would make for a better read. However, I wrote this for a special friend. I used his words :)
Thank you for the feedback
I felt the spirit and sentiments you express clearly. I would have broken up the line:
"You find yourself unworthy of redemption" or just left it "you find yourself unworthy" for a smoother read.