All Comments on 'Yours Til The End'

I'd like this (and most of your submissions) if it wasn't all rhyming couplets which get wearying to the eye after a while. If you write for the public to read please do consider how this affects your reader! Please come the Poetry forum where you'll learn other forms to write in and will be very welcome. This isn't criticism by the way it's critique :)

I definitely appreciate all forms of feedback since I'm an aspiring poetess. Thx for taking the time to comment.