by My Erotic Tale
that is sooo sad!! and so romantic... i truly enjoy how you think, it is obvious that you actually put effort and much thought into your work, it is a pleasure to read you, everytime :)
I can tell you love being outside in it all because you write about it so naturally--and yet it's a very introspective poem. Very Zen, yes. And you're editing them, you sly dog. I can tell that, too. :D
Really nice, 'as if it just began'
This flower has other tools besides a hammer.
as the shortness of a lovely haiku...with blossoms....well versed...blue
Way to go Art
I find that your talents are forming nicely.
You have grown as a poet and this write shows
that your poetic nature shines. Keep up the
wonderful writing and I will look forward to
reading your writes.
Once again Art you take a simple essence and apply it to a grander scale! Faithful solid perseverance is exhibited in this powerful work... this is strong:
RE:
Still it's bloom will unfold
without worry of it's end
greeting each moment
as if it just began,
The last flower song.
Let us hope no more last flower songs....
Du~
I see why the first stanza is as long as the last, for balance. I think it can be shortened, and made a little less in your face. I don't know why, but I like the last line.