All Comments on '31st of February Street'

Way too short imho. I'd given a higher rate if this was more fleshed out, especially post-bust.

Interesting!

5

Excellent! Your best story yet!

Steve should take a mistress.

Why not?

Pt2 I want him to have the life that makes the others think suicide lol

Good one.

Needed a better end.

Liz could have shot herself or Mark.

Best is that you should write a sequel.

I've always enjoyed reading your stories.

Hope to see more!

Well done

It was so good to start with but went downhill rapidly. It was a simple equation, surely?

Steven killed Mark, then Liz and lastly himself. Leaving everything to Sandy on the proviso she raised the 4 children. If you are going to write dark then write dark.

Scores 3/5 for what ended up being a very ordinary story.

Better luck next time.

Clever plot idea.

Was divorce that easy in Victorian England that Liz really thought that she could divorce Steve, and Mark could divorce Sandy so that they could be together?

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"I am not trivializing the magnitude of my mistake but this meant nothing to me." - A common cheater's refrain, but all that it means is that they jeopardized their marriage for nothing.

I've read this scenario somewhere else.

2 pretty good stories on the same day. You made Mark become Mike, but all in all, a good tale for a super short story.

Very good flash story. I would have loved Sandy to get assertive, tell Steve to tie the cheaters to chairs, and then fuck him passionately in front of them, giving him all three holes. Where it would go from there would be up to the writer. Any suggestions?

It was a good story, provocative, a real perplexing choice. Really ... no good outcome for anyone.

On the lighter side, 31st of February ... Street, in the name of the story got me to thinking. If February did have 31 days in it instead of 28 and sometimes 29, I would be 195.75 days younger. I feel cheated.

Wargamer very concisely evaluated the story and probable outcome. Another would be that as a doctor and being able to financially survive anywhere, he kills his asshole brother, his slut wife then moves to an expanding, young U.S. and lives a great life raising his children to have moral strength of character.

FTDS

The ticking time bomb has revealed the truth. Sad to say Stephen was right, about the desecrating the whole family's love and ties

5 Stars from me. I am pleased to see you are posting again. Welldone.

There is no eighth grade in the UK it's Y and a number

Welcome back!

Interesting story. I liked it as just a quick snapshot of time brought on by a cheating wife. I generally don't like these but I think you did a good job with this one.

If you're going to set the story in Victorian England, with a "horse carriage" outside the door, you might want to get some details right.

"Steve"???? A man in Victorian England would be called "Stephen". The term "blow job" wouldn't be used, and there isn't any such thing as "8th grade " in English schools and never has been.

Even the name "Sandy " for a Victorian lady is extremely dubious.

That was more depressing than anything.

Mmmm.... The OCD part of me is itching! In Victorian London:

• A doctor's home would probably be three or four stories tall with the upper floor being servants quarters

• Even if not wealthy the doctor would still provide his wife a nanny and housekeeper, a cook too if money allowed

• There is not a backyard, it's a "garden" where the children play on sunny days, not rainy ones

• Most likely there won't be a front porch, a Doctor does not allow his children..."to play in the street!"

• There would probably be a nursery where his daughters played on rainy days

• In Victorian London Mark would not have promised Elizabeth (never Liz) to divorce his wife Sandra (never Sandy), what would the grounds have been? Sandra had done nothing wrong. Elizabeth would have been the scandalous one having had an affair with her brother-in-law. Mark would have been 'marked' as a Cad, with the capital 'C'. Even if married Mark and Elizabeth would be ostracized in polite society

• Most likely Steven (never Steve) would have had his "hysterical" wife Elizabeth quietly committed to a sanitorium for the rest of her natural life, yes, that's how problem wives went away in Victorian elite society

Crud like this happened frequently among upper class families but because of the potential fallout it was typically swept under the rug, covered up, squashed or made 'to go away'. If their father found out about it it is quite likely that the younger brother and his family would be ordered away. Some friend of the Father likely had a Calcutta export office in need of a clerk or assistant manager. Mark's inheritance might likely take a hit as well. - TANSTAAFL

silentsoundabout said about 11 hours ago

"Steve should take a mistress. Why not?" - In Victorian he might of had one already...depends on his morality, ethics and level of wealth to support that type of 'venture'. I don't think he had though from from how the story reads. - TANSTAAFL

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Thank you for doing what so few ever attempt here...using effort, imagination and some out of the box thinking to make a story, that yes has to have the cliches we've all come to know and despise, in a way that removed the stain of the word cliche from them.

Well done!!

We could use more well thought out and written stories like this.

Sophie really didn’t have a choice. Good story, but in Victorian England I doubt the Dr. Would have been convicted of he had killed Mark in a crime of passion.

This story makes no sense. Oh, you think Mark condemning Liz to death is some kind of watershed revelation that will haunt Liz for the rest of her life? At the right opportunity, probably while seducing her again, Mark will convince the brainless Liz that he suggested Liz be shot because he knew her husband would never kill his children's mother. And Liz apparently believed all the other bullshit Mark told her, so why not? Let the fucking continue. The person who Should be shot is the pathetic cuckold who lacks the spine to deal with Mark directly, in all aspects physical, intellectual, and financial. I suggest he arrange to have Mark's dick cut off, and beaten to an extent that leaves him mentally dysfunctional and in a wheel chair. I don't think Liz or Sandy will have much to do with a dickless brainless dependent drooling fool from that point on. And such a beating would not even incur capital punishment.

An opportunity missed. But thanks for the effort.

A reasonable story.

But it was all about the pain.

Where's the fun in that?

4 out of 5 from me.

Sbrooks103x asked - was divorce that easy in Victorian England - and the answer is no, until quite late in the 19th century in the UK a man could only apply for divorce by getting an Act of Parliament passed to allow him to do so. Wives and children were property and could be treated as their husband/father felt suitable. Among the "lower" classes the husband could sell his wife, but only with her agreement; such sales were normally agreed beforehand although some were public auctions (this is true, but not too common). This story has so many historical inaccuracies I am not going to comment on that!

Great storytelling.

I have nothing more to say.

That is how impressed I am with the story.

5 star, which I rarely give.

I don't know why this takes place in Victorian time. It could be today too. Was there even divorce back than?

Why should the cousin have now contact with each other? Why is he angry at Sandy?

Sandy divorces asshole Mark and tells his parents parents to disband the asshole or never see the grandchildren. So the grandchildren see each other and the only losers will be the two cheaters. Maybe Sandy and Steve become a couple.

Easy riddle to solve- give Liz the gun and force her to shoot Mark. Win-win.

I liked it, though set in Victorian London, there is no 8th Grade to be in love from, we don't have Grades 8th or otherwise in the UK.

Having said that it was an enjoyable little read but very USA not UK despite the setting.

A bit of a picky comment maybe but meant as entirely constructive.

Thanks for taking the effort to entertain us with your writing!

Wonderful to see you writing and posting stories again. You were doing the 750 word thing way before it was cool.

Good work! An interesting story about sex with no sex in it. An unusual setting that helped explain the restaint on the violent intentions. This is an entertaining work of fiction, NOT a documentary. Get a life people.

Nice story line and a totally different approach of dismissing of cheating wife

It's not an ending. Too much up in the air.

I wouldn't have minded more, but I've read longer that didn't end as well. I gave you all 5 for a great little story.

Rough !

Bordered cuck line! Sad that the cheaters got off!especially Mark!

Children need their fathers more than their mothers. That goes for both boys and girls.

no conoces el concepto de cierre en tus putas historias?

escribes bien.... pero deja de ser tan flojo!

Not bad, but think about your language. If a house is in central London, it isn’t suburban… And the word ‘blowjob’ definitely didn’t exist a decade after Victoria came to the throne.

You are very good with short stories.