All Comments on '5hr Ago and Still Can't Believe It'

Is English your second language? Not a bad premise, but the writing was very stilted. Not usually one to complain about grammar unless it distracts from the story, but this one sadly does just that. And less is more. No one wants to read how great you are with your nine inch penis (doubtful), driving a Mercedes, your looks are so wonderful, etc, any more than they want to hear it from a douchebag in real life.

I try to encourage rather than discourage like many on the site. So try again, dial back the every woman wants me persona, and get an editor. Do those things, and an idea like you had will really pop.

Having written a lot of erotica here, I loved this!

It reeks of credibility... it feels like you jumped up and wrote this as you suggest

So ignore the grammar police...I discovered how difficulty it is write with my cock hard!

As someone said.. "Men are born with two heads, and only enough blood to use one at a time"...

I would love to hear more!

Oliver

Tell us that is your first attempt writing ! Please go back to school and take writing classes !

You lost me at the 8" dick almost 9" when I was 26.. Look son, know something about anatomy BEFORE you start writing Bullshit.. A large penis measures nothing over 7.5 inches (and that is too large for almost all women). The video graphic Porn Industry is infamous for making things appear larger than they really are.. BUT no human on this planet, has a penis larger than 7 inches long, and 4 inches in diameter.. Please keep that in mind..

I have read quite a few of the stories on here. There are a shit ton of stories that appear to be written by 1st graders. I saw nothing wrong with the story. What is funny. The grammar police are the worst writers ever!!! Most can not remember descriptions they start with. Then change it up half way through their own story. They do not remember if they killed someone off early in their story. Then write them back in later. So dont listen to the grammar police!!!! You wrote a good story.

Who cares about what kind of car you drive, but since you went there. Driving a Mercedes doesn’t go with staying at a Days Inn.

This was my first story here because my other one was rejected. But this wasn't fiction, people. I gave a detailed description of who I am and how i Iook and what I drive and set the whole scene because I think the fact that she finds me physically attractive and sexy and has always told me that. Due to age restriction on stories, I couldn't include how when we both lived at home I would jerk off with my bedroom door open, or even under a blanket right next to her on the couch. By the time I was out of high school, and she hadn't been living at home for years, except for summer and holidays, if she was in the mood she would sit next to me on my bed watching TV or playing sega while I laid next to her essentially naked and uncovered and would jerk off. I'd say "I'm gonna cum!" And she would look at me cum on myself. She never touched me but I could tell she was getting worked up. She would ask me questions about my girlfriends or what I was thinking about. When I was 18 and visited her at college, we had partied and got snowed in at her house. We had to share a bed. I was able to slide my left hand down her panties and held her bum, squeezed her bum while I jerked off in the open next to her. She was drunk and wasn't totally participatory, but pushed her ass against my hand. That was the first time I felt comfortable (or drunk) enough to tell her I wanted to cum on her tits, and every time I do this I picture cumming on her tits. This time when I came I rolled to my left and pointed it up close to where my other hand was and pulled her panties down a little bit and came on the top of her ass.

I only got to jerk off in front of her a few more times. There were plenty of times in the summers when I would get home at night, parents away, and hear the bed squeaking upstairs and her yelling while getting fucked by a summer fuckbuddy or workmate or whomever.

"Oh my God yes!" "Cum inside me! Do it!". One night I brought a girl home and we were going to my basement room and I heard her come in upstairs with a regular friend and his friend from college. All three went in to the master bathroom with walk in shower and took a shower. I snuck up the steps and heard them double-teaming her in the shower. Then all 3 went to her room and stayed all night. I knew she was very sexual. We had been nearly intimate for years. She knew I wanted to fuck her. I told her all the time when she would watch me.

Now she's been married for 23 years, mundane life, same boring partner, and here we are as adults in a once in a lifetime situation. She drank extra wine. She acted extra flirty. She probably knew I would want to jerk off in front of her. Now she felt desired and carefree. She felt safe and not like a cheater because it's just me.

When I spooned her and she felt my hard cock pressing in to her, I felt pushback, not push-away. I treated her with desire and sensuality... When I wanted to touch her tits, her body said yes and she actually undid the buttons! I massaged them and kissed them gently and sucked them sexually and kept telling her how hot she was and how perfect her body is. As I was lost just sucking them wildly, I felt her hands reach for me and find the bow on my shorts. She started to stroke me so I laid down next to her kissing her tits and neck. I could tell she wanted to get me off, to make me cum. Finally I did cum in her hand. It was a lifetime of desire shot out all at once all over her arm and hand and my chest and self.... That all really happened. English is my first language. I consider myself to be a more than competent writer, but I tried a-la-Hemingway to be simple and direct. She finds me hot, finds me sexy. She was amazed at how my dick felt in her hands, Amazed by what I could do to her body. And that handjob was NOT the end of that. I submitted a second story that was rejected for capitalization and shit. If anyone wants to edit please tell me. We spent the rest of the 2 days journey like boyfriend and girlfriend. Last week she stopped by my new apartment and we spent almost an hour in bed. She's 48, can't have kids anymore, will remain married to her husband forever and it's OK. But she realized that she enjoys the feeling of being desired and wanted and ravished and used like she used to be when she was younger. It's risk-free and guilt-free. There's no chance of us running off or getting pregnant or anything.

Later on that first night in the hotel room, I did finally get to cum on her tits. She rubbed it in and went to sleep. We took showers together. I fucked her in the bed and in the shower. I fucked her in a family restroom at a rest stop. She swallowed my cum while I drove. She fingered herself next to me while I drove and we talked.

She told me she knew that I could hear her getting fucked and she liked that. She fucked that kid and his friend a dozen times over the years and one of them got her pregnant at 19. While a college freshman, a handsome 40-something married professor with kids who taught an 8am asked her out.

She would go to his office and blow him almost every day. One day he told her that if she let him fuck her with no condom he would give her an A both semesters and she could sleep in all year. That afternoon she went to his office in sweats with no panties and he bent her over his desk, pulled down her pants, and fucked her until he came inside her. Then every week, couple times a week she would go by his office and take his load in her pussy. She would tell me these things as I fucked her. I had already told her that I was in love and was thinking about her every time I jerked off in front of her. She told me she always loved my dick and wanted to touch it so badly but never did. I told her about watching my ex wife getting fucked by a hot swedish teenager with a 10" cock in South America while tripping. And how he came and stayed in our hut with us for 3 nights and fucked her all day every day. She swallowed his cum, let him cum inside her with no birth control whenever he wanted to, and fucked her ass 4 times and came in it, all things she didn't let me do.

.. Janie and I have a much better relationship now than ever before. We sext and send nudes, etc. I let her know that she is the sexiest girl in my world and gets me so horny. Our ride home ended at her house. We took a shower, got in her and her husband's bed naked, and made love like newlyweds. We kissed and we stared into eyes, we talked, we encouraged each other, we kissed while I came inside her pussy every time. I know she can't get pregnant, so the dirty talk is on point. I tell her I want to put my baby inside her, and she tells me to do it, get her pregnant how I want to... It's all harmless. She stopped by last night coming from our parents house. She stayed almost and hour and I came in her pussy once and in her mouth once. She is the best blowjob I have ever had.

Go for it! Hope it was fun. If not true, then not much of a tale...no consequences, no drama, no insight into what sis is thinking.