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AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

Draw out the escalation to sex more. This good idea for a story was well written until you had them go from 0-100 in half a sentence

pepperjacket1pepperjacket1about 1 year ago

Fuck, that was hot. I have cum in my boxers thinking more about Tommy fucking me than the women, not that I would reject them, would love to fuck my Daughter in law, she is hot, seen her looking at my bulge when we go there for saunas etc and her little cunt lips always seem to be pouting out for me.

RodThrustinRodThrustinabout 1 year ago

A little bit more of Mom's history with the two. What you've told us is not enough to warrant the last line.

Also, when you have dialog, it's important to close the quotes. You missed that at least twice.

All in all, though a telling of a good horny fantasy.

cursrahcursrahabout 1 year ago

more of this story please

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"I write erotic stories. Porn, really. Erotica is too elegant a word for the carnal little vignettes that I enjoy spinning. Even calling them short stories is stretching truth, without much character or plot to speak of; little episodes of sexual depravity. They are merely mom...