by cheddar_cheese
A great story. Though a bit difficult to believe the circumstances, But more than made up with raw sex. Loved it. 5 STARS.
Yeah an editor would have sharpened things up but this isn't a NY publishing house its a free story website, get over your grammer fetish please. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Use 'an' if the next word starts with a vowel sound. If it does not, then use 'a'.
This is not grammar school. I have people who don't get it dat this ain't no skull book.
In most of the English-speaking world, 'come' is synonymous with 'cum'.
I wish some ignorant US citizens could learn that their way isn't the only way.
As others have also posted flaws add these to the mix. The title begins the list, it should be "A" not 'AN' as then the use of "come" rather than the accepted "cum" when referring to an orgasm, just makes the story difficult and confusing to read. Spell check alone won't find these errors the author has to proof read the story not once but multiple times.
this is a great story. mabey use more spellcheck next time but other than that i cant wait for the next one.
'Welsh (also welch); fail to honour a debt or obligation...' etc.
Oxford Dictionary of English.
The word should be 'welch' not 'welsh'
Wiktionary definition - "Welch - A person who defaults on an obligation, especially a small one. "
That was the only complaint, using "an" instead of "a" in the title. Well, I don't have a complaint at all. I think it was a pretty good story. I'd like to read the next chapter. Hopefully the author can continue the story without it becoming too unrealistic.
An should only be used in front of a noun that begins with a vowel or a vowel sound.