All Comments on 'A Brother In Law With Benefits'

Did the truth or dare stuff very well. Normally I can't read a story that has the game in it.

Nicely written and very erotic... well done

Loved your story, it was so real I felt like I was present

Loved it... Sequel opportunity is great too. I liked the way you made the guy's innocence come into the forefront

The lady role was just nice too... not overdone

The story was very well written and extremely sensual. Great sequel potential, not overdone at all. The softness and reluctance of the lady was a thing of beauty. Keep up the good work. I'd like to read more about the woman she seems beautiful inside and out, and would probably be hot and sexy in any situation.

loved the pace the story took off on.. nothing better that an older sis-in-law to teach a young man life.... been there done that... very fond memories!!!

This was an excellent story. There is a tendancy in some erotic stories for the spelling and grammer to become increasingly inept as the action in the story gets hotter. To me this subtracts from the experience. There is a scene in this story, for instance, that is very hot. But one sentence just seems to go on and on and on until it seems like it will never stop and the reader is left trying to figure out where he would put the periods if he had the chance...well you get the picture.

Suggestion: when writing the love scenes, type with two hands.

Nicely written and believable. The way it develops is great. I can't wait to see what happens after this :)

Yes, I agree that this story needed to be edited a bit, but I loved it otherwise. I felt the tension build to the climax at the end. The characters were developed well and it flowed nicley from begining to end. Great job!

Well Mandycamp, you wrote a wonderful story. You made our evening of erotica so hot and it is even so much more sensous now that I see the story on this sight, it is even hotter. Thank you so much for the great evening, and story.

Brad

Excellent tale, well written. Hurry with part two !!!

I really enjoyed your story. I liked the way the action built-up and how the characters couldn't help but give in to their lustful desires. I love the idea of doing something that feels really good, but you can't becaused it's supposedly taboo. This was a great read. Thanks. Gen ;)

wow.wow.wow

I liked the content of your story, things built slowly, you didn't jump into sex too fast, and the characters were nicely defined.

It needed proofreading. Those pesky little spelling errors, dropped words, and grammatical errors detract from enjoying the story. Everytime I see one, it pulls me out of the story thought process.

Use a spellchecker, at least. Having someone else look at it to proofread it would be better. There's always the volunteer editors too.

This is a well written story. Most people would enjoy reading it. That is most people having good taste.

This is a very honest seduction that definitely needs a continuation. Perhaps the two of them can continue without his brother/her husband getting any the wiser, even with them starting a family for her and her husband, at first unknowingly?

From the title, I didn't think I would be expecially turned on by the story. How wrong I was. That was so very erotic.

DC

They need to keep fucking with her getting pregnant by Brad, but her husband does not know that the baby is not his.

Now for the next 12!

Nicely written and HOT! Love your writing!

Excellent articulation....enjoyed it

I will njoy to read more chapters in this story, brad fucking her in different situation etc, love your writing too.

You could make a baby with your brother-in-law and chances are that your hubby would not know the difference as the baby would inherit your husband's physical characteristics in his family for the baby. So proceed with this story with that in mind....

Your stories are sharp and hugely welcome in this category as far as I, and for sure, others, are concerned. Oh and Don 85647, priceless too! Yer funny fuckin' weirdo...Mancelt.

When I married I was 22 and my younger brother was 18 and a strapping young boy. We had on numerous occasions masturbated together and even shared girls together, as such were very close. When I got married those meetings were disturbed, but once while on a business stop over out station when we spent the night together we were in the same double bed and in the course of the night played with each others cocks. He was handling my cock and remarked that by continuous fucking and sucking by my wife my cock was now big in size and girth, and his was less. I assured him his was also good and on the spur of the moment that night it was decide that he would get intimate with his Bhabhi,my wife and when he got married I would do the same. Well on the next night he goth to fuck his Bhabhi, my wife, and soon, my other B.I.L.( her sisters husband) also joined in and fucked her. now she was truly royally fucked as having three randy studs to service her, and it was really tiring for her as her nights were fully monopolised.

That was nice. The slow progression into becoming a bit on the wild side without being crude or extreme was very sexy and kind of HOT.

Liked this story's teasing progression. Believable.

This story and the one written by u r exactly the same in the beginning....

My Brother-In-Law Ch. 01

byxleglover©

Check out guys....

Cuz i swear i just read this story from exglover. Did u get help from someone or did u just steal someone else's story. Be careful with that...

Badly in need of major editing. Would have been a fun read otherwise.

You lifted content for this story from another author here. Consider yourself reported.

check the dates of the two stories.

A Brother in Law With Benefits was published in 2004. My Brother in Law was published in 2011.

Now which one do you think was first?

No points for guessing right.

Hmm. A rally sweet story even though the ending felt a little bit rushed. (They were in the shower and you don't even mention them drying off themselves before getting dressed.) I can ignore the grammar errors too. Really want to read the second part now ... .

and everyone is cheering?

I liked your Story... Keep writing....

cheating is cheating . Unless this hubby is a cuckhold, this marriage is over, and the brother better run.

Aren't you Must be special little whore? Cheating with your husband's brother. Special hell for both of you.

Its a story dumbass

It's a really bad story though dickhead.

My wife did a very similar thing with my 14yo nephew except she did let him fuck her and many times while he stayed at our place for three months. We all loved it and he and i used to take turns on her every night.

When will she finish him off

What a massive slut.

4 stars from me as I found this to be very hot! I would advise you to get an editor, but for the most part, I found it to be very well-written. It brought up memories of when I was dating my fiancée during college and figured out that my younger brother of 5 years got the hots for her. I didn't realize it at the time, but I think she was flattered by the attention he gave her. One time I was home from law school for the summer, and she had come to spend a couple of weeks with me at my parents' house (and I would in return spend a couple of weeks at her parents' house during her summer break). For some reason she was super horny the first couple of nights and insisted that I fuck her multiple times before dinner. Because my little brother and I shared a common wall and bathroom, I suspected he got an earful of her moans as we tried to remain quiet, but she was insatiable and wanted me to pound her pussy hard. I would not have been surprised to have learned that he peeped on us through the common bathroom door. One night after we were married and in our apartment, I accidentally mentioned that my little brother had probably watched us. I thought it was kind of funny, but suddenly I could feel her pussy spasming around my dick as she came and began wildly kissing me. She had always been very plain in bed and had told me that she had no sexual fantasies at all. Well, I then discovered that she in fact had fantasies of fucking both my well-hung father AND my little brother. Anytime we were making love and I wanted to turn it up a notch, I would ask her about fucking one or the other, and our pillow-talk would be extremely raunchy... it never failed to get her off when I would suggest that she let the two of them tag-team her. If I had been more clever at the time, I would have sent her to mess with my little brother in her nightgown once my parents had gone to sleep. It might have been very exciting!

Like the previous post, my younger brother would come to stay with us for a week at a time. Being filled with hormones, I knew he had the hots for her and my wife loved turning guys on anyway. I told her one night while we were fucking that he would love to see her naked and she would get him highly aroused. It turned her on and she grew wetter and wetter, then came real hard. Later, I learned that she went into his room after I went to sleep one night, took off her clothes and let him see and feel her. He had not felt a woman's breasts before, nor had he ever touched a woman's pussy. But, she helped educate him. She spread her legs and showed him her pussy in great detail, and just as in this story, she rubbed her wet pussy lips along his erect dick and soaked him. She rubbed along his shaft until he came, and she let him finger her until she came. I also later learned that she let him fuck her several times. She would ask me in bed, "What would you think if I showed Jimmy my pussy? Do you think he'd get hard?" She would tempt and tease me with such questions and comments, and I would tease her back about it.

Definitely a cheater with husbands brother.

Made hubby a cuck!

Bill S.

Your stories are always so hot, Manny. This one is no exception.

Rye

ryeandgingerayle2@yahoo.ca