All Comments on 'A Business Trip with Benefits'

Careful of the proofreading - things like the 3d sentence - distract - but a great start and a 5!

Wrong catagory! This belongs in Loving Wives, with these two cheaters!!

Gosh, a major grammatical error. You need an editor.

Good premise.

But much too rushed. Sex starts too abruptly and continues too fast.

Needs much more in the way of preliminaries/foreplay. Step by step. Chock full of details. With dialog. Much more dialog.

Four fingers up the pussy? A bit much. And much too soon.

Each fingering the other's ass? Again, too fast. Too soon.

Lacks any explanation about why she's so hot to trot right off the bat.

And you need an editor/proofreader. Particularly with the lack if apostrophes indicating possessives.

Three stars.

Not a lot - difficult to relate to a story when it tells me that I have a pussy when referring to a male reader.

Try harder - only 2 stars for this effort

Just some more in the endless line of cheating assholes that get posted day after day. Yawn.

Need to work on the writing, but good start