by SmallTitFan
Good story, but we get it. You call her "Miss Sarah" Unless the character in the story is referring to her in the first person, by the pet name he calls her, the story should, in 3rd person references, call her "Sarah."
Until more than two characters enter the story, there is little reason to keep using their names in their supposed dialog.
This is meant as a constructive comment. I hope you take it that way.
I do in fact have an idea from my own life; what you've gone through. Mine however just started 6 months ago.
You've made these characters very real to some of us; your memories and emotions have made us realize just how special this lovely young lady was & still is to you.
Thanks;
DKP
It makes me wonder what would ever happen "if" she found this story!!
Yes I've read the whole story, a chapter or two twice over. I can only fantasize about fucking a young teenager, but really would love trying to. Thanks for an exciting read. Your a very good author.
What happened? The conversational style has changed dramatically? Not that it's a problem, just curious....