All Comments on 'A Chance Encounter'

by deepblue32

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ph325ph325almost 16 years ago
Totally hot

The collaboration works wonderfully.

BimusicmanBimusicmanabout 13 years ago
critique

I think your story has excellent potential but the flow is confusing. The sudden switch between characters is very abrupt and my partner and me definitely got a little lost. The sex is great, but unlike visual porn where we don't care about the dialogue, in print it's vitally important. Great effort, would be interested in seeing more.

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