All Comments on 'A Change in Perception Ch. 02'

This is quite good, promising. My picky thing I probably wouldn’t have noticed if I hadn’t read the chapters back to back. But, in chapter 1, she lives at the end of the bus line; this is a nice touch. It adds depth to the story, as well as some intriguing possibilities. But now, when she’s heading to work, the bus is full before it gets to her. Uh ... huh?

Again, I’m being picky. Please don’t take this as criticism, because I’m enjoying this story greatly.